tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post4687555262023272674..comments2023-09-28T02:07:32.436-07:00Comments on Through the Looking Glass: Getting It OutMelissahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12096764010151024050noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-63899882057424329042010-08-02T14:56:01.953-07:002010-08-02T14:56:01.953-07:00Melissa, how absolutely horrifying for both of you...Melissa, how absolutely horrifying for both of you. I almost drown during a swim lesson at five years of age and I still remember the horror of those minutes. I know how your mother felt. I can only imagine how you felt watching it all happen. This was a great recreation of such a traumatic event - I felt like I was there as I read it. My breath caught in my throat as I watched your mom struggle against the water. I'm just relieved that this had a good outcome. Thanks for sharing it with us. You painted such a vivid picture!Jennie Baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02088195986628533511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-65390156439823868372010-08-02T08:37:07.006-07:002010-08-02T08:37:07.006-07:00Sounds terrifying. But your writing is wonderful. ...Sounds terrifying. But your writing is wonderful. You captured the images and emotions so vividly. Have you considered submitting this to a literary journal? Duotrope and NewPages are excellent sites for literary journal information.<br /><br />I'm glad your mom is safe and doing well! And I'm glad you are, too.Laura S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13934230198562773803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-54097575892978156852010-08-02T02:51:13.797-07:002010-08-02T02:51:13.797-07:00The writing is perfect. You know why? Because it ...The writing is perfect. You know why? Because it portrays real emotion. real imagery. I don't know if this really happened or not but it doesn't matter (well, I mean, if it WAS real, we're glad everyone's ok). We were there. Very well done!Creepy Query Girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18115161057496086972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-23823747312310097362010-08-02T01:13:33.754-07:002010-08-02T01:13:33.754-07:00This was powerful. Ensnaring. Heart-breaking despi...This was powerful. Ensnaring. Heart-breaking despite the happy ending. Beautiful. Salude.<br /><br /><3 Kelsey LeighKris n' Kelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15273239971556065096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-57941796233004540882010-08-01T14:46:22.686-07:002010-08-01T14:46:22.686-07:00I know it doesn’t take much to doubt ourselves as ...I know it doesn’t take much to doubt ourselves as writers… it probably a prerequisite.<br />I did like it; I was able to see it clearly. <br /><br />Maybe somewhere add some sound, like birds mocking peacefully in the background. <br /><br />My experience with waves is that they toss you forwards then rip you back, so maybe the wave would buffet her forwards in your grasps then rip her away again.<br /><br />I am giving the advice I would want if I wrote it. Hope it helps—no doubt you have great talent, don’t listen to that negative voice telling you it doesn’t work.<br /><br />The biggest problem when I write something, is it never lives up to what I see when I write it, so I figure it sucks and will never come across the way it should.<br /><br />Great stuff keep it up.Jeff Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-56307848139404290412010-08-01T12:37:59.742-07:002010-08-01T12:37:59.742-07:00Wow. That's all I can say. You told me the sto...Wow. That's all I can say. You told me the story but how you wrote it here gave me tingles. Just wow. I'm so sorry this happened to you and your family. The week is over. I'm really glad I have you in my life.Ramonanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-500340035994032802010-07-31T09:21:32.654-07:002010-07-31T09:21:32.654-07:00That was some powerful writing! I was mesmorized....That was some powerful writing! I was mesmorized...and then enlightened by the insight at the end.<br /><br /><br />Truly good stuff!DL Hammonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02007260062331783715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-39692025688330966802010-07-30T11:33:53.772-07:002010-07-30T11:33:53.772-07:00Hey Melissa,
What a terrifying experience! Wow. An...Hey Melissa,<br />What a terrifying experience! Wow. And so brave of you to post too. It's not bad writing. You're so hard on yourself!<br /><br />I responded to your comment on my blog, btw. I wanted to say that in medias res is not the ONLY way to start a story, it's only one technique. So it doesn't mean yours is wrong, it's only food for thought. <br />If your story isn't meant to start this way, that's okay!<br />:)<br />LydiaLydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-31302408731717437512010-07-30T11:30:53.627-07:002010-07-30T11:30:53.627-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-790564242577823892010-07-30T06:48:29.447-07:002010-07-30T06:48:29.447-07:00Amazing!!!! It's been awhile since I stopped b...Amazing!!!! It's been awhile since I stopped by but I'm loving that I'm here now!!! LOVED IT!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03667521490706435608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-66742673664502952002010-07-29T19:55:27.983-07:002010-07-29T19:55:27.983-07:00Great writing--you hooked me! Such a strong scene....Great writing--you hooked me! Such a strong scene. And I, too, love the last line. Wow.<br /><br />Thanks for commenting on my blog. It was great to hear from you :-)Kenda Turnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12972218446945404475noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-31725387376220263862010-07-29T19:31:47.357-07:002010-07-29T19:31:47.357-07:00Very intense indeed! Wow, did this really happen-...Very intense indeed! Wow, did this really happen--I was so scared, on the edge of my seat.<br /><br />I love that last line too--it's very true.WritingNuthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16326756274887055685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-77487762508638073892010-07-29T14:20:32.542-07:002010-07-29T14:20:32.542-07:00Very intense! I loved it. We all have to lose our ...Very intense! I loved it. We all have to lose our parents at one point, and it strikes me now and then with a pang.Aubriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10884036126491922530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-14443095053140917912010-07-29T11:50:02.564-07:002010-07-29T11:50:02.564-07:00OMG Melissa. My heart skipped several beats.
Is t...OMG Melissa. My heart skipped several beats.<br /><br />Is this a true story? Did this really happen to your family? <br /><br />I think it's beautiful and emotional.Writer Junkiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07573172700117296650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-32204136497037483052010-07-29T10:46:32.118-07:002010-07-29T10:46:32.118-07:00Don't know how you managed to capture my thoug...Don't know how you managed to capture my thoughts before I got swept into the ocean. I WAS mesmerized by the ocean- which is why I stayed there too long. I had lost complete track of time and felt free. Maybe it was what you saw through the camera lenses when you took my picture as I stood there.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-2264701931430022962010-07-29T07:16:46.644-07:002010-07-29T07:16:46.644-07:00...I thought it was quite good, and sharing anythi......I thought it was quite good, and sharing anything you're undecided about was a worthy decision, this our "practice field" after all. <br />Whenever I'm not happy about something I've written, I put it on the shelf for a while and think about it while mowing the yard or walking the dog. The puzzle piece you're looking for will show itself in time:)Elliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-26355278077360106322010-07-29T07:04:06.564-07:002010-07-29T07:04:06.564-07:00Wow! That was amazing! That last part was my fav...Wow! That was amazing! That last part was my favorite as well. Well done!Renaehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08190361875174742351noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-395886755359070021.post-66907372613059967712010-07-29T06:39:08.484-07:002010-07-29T06:39:08.484-07:00um wow, girl you had me mesmerized (TRULY) and won...um wow, girl you had me mesmerized (TRULY) and wondering if this was real (true?). My favorite line:And then with a mischievous grin, the water tries to steal you, to assert it’s dominance. To prove that no matter how strong man feels, he will never have the upper hand.Christina Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01799776834213400246noreply@blogger.com